Story revamp:
Discuss things here!
What we have so far:
Mhirou is still in the gang when the story starts. She progressively notes the feeling of being followed, and gets more and more paranoid as the story progresses. Perhapes there is a point where she realizes she may be going insane, and then when Ephidell actually shows up she is somewhat relieved? Even though she is scared shitless, haha. Maybe she even thinks HE himself is a phantom in her head for a while. Mental stuff!
-At one point she actually shoots her gun at whatever she thinks is following her. The police get called about the gunshot and she takes cover!
-Maybe Khard gets hurt as a result of some disagreement and there is drama between Mhirou and the other members?
(Is Khard even still around in the beginning? I know originally she hadn't seen him in years and thought he was dead but.. maybe he can be reintroduced as a more relevant character this way?)
-Mhirou says "screw you" to them, basically, and acts all tough like she is DONE and struts off. But after a day of being hungry and with no where else to go, (Maybe she had planned to crash with an old friend but it didn't take?) and also being FOLLOWED (or so she thinks) she comes crawling back.
-But they're still sore with her and won't take her back that easily. "You're not worth a whole lot right now", maybe.
They have her rob a convenience store for some quick cash in order to pay them back and let her back in.
-Maybe Mhirou goes along with it in the thought of, "If I get enough money from this I'm buying my own food and getting out of here", or something.
-Mhirou tries to rob the gas station or whatever, but it's a bad part of town and the shopkeeper is used to hooligans. Mhirou snatches a candy bar she sees at the counter and gets distracted while she opens it to eat it, and the shopkeep pulls a fast one on her-- maybe knocks her out with a baseball bat? Pressed a call button? Pulls out their own gun? Who knows.
Point is, Mhirou gets caught by the police and hand-cuffed/put into a cop car.
-The police are handling issues with the shop when the door to the car just BREAKS and opens up.
(Maybe Ephidell had knocked the cop that was watching the car out so she could escape.)
-Mhirou runs away even though she's thinking "WTF HAPPENED" and goes back to the gang for help.
-Well they're DEFINITELY not going to let her back in now with the cops after her!
-And then maybe Ephidell appears when she's handcuffed. OHHHHH. Lol. Terrible. xD
What we have so far:
Mhirou is still in the gang when the story starts. She progressively notes the feeling of being followed, and gets more and more paranoid as the story progresses. Perhapes there is a point where she realizes she may be going insane, and then when Ephidell actually shows up she is somewhat relieved? Even though she is scared shitless, haha. Maybe she even thinks HE himself is a phantom in her head for a while. Mental stuff!
-At one point she actually shoots her gun at whatever she thinks is following her. The police get called about the gunshot and she takes cover!
-Maybe Khard gets hurt as a result of some disagreement and there is drama between Mhirou and the other members?
(Is Khard even still around in the beginning? I know originally she hadn't seen him in years and thought he was dead but.. maybe he can be reintroduced as a more relevant character this way?)
-Mhirou says "screw you" to them, basically, and acts all tough like she is DONE and struts off. But after a day of being hungry and with no where else to go, (Maybe she had planned to crash with an old friend but it didn't take?) and also being FOLLOWED (or so she thinks) she comes crawling back.
-But they're still sore with her and won't take her back that easily. "You're not worth a whole lot right now", maybe.
They have her rob a convenience store for some quick cash in order to pay them back and let her back in.
-Maybe Mhirou goes along with it in the thought of, "If I get enough money from this I'm buying my own food and getting out of here", or something.
-Mhirou tries to rob the gas station or whatever, but it's a bad part of town and the shopkeeper is used to hooligans. Mhirou snatches a candy bar she sees at the counter and gets distracted while she opens it to eat it, and the shopkeep pulls a fast one on her-- maybe knocks her out with a baseball bat? Pressed a call button? Pulls out their own gun? Who knows.
Point is, Mhirou gets caught by the police and hand-cuffed/put into a cop car.
-The police are handling issues with the shop when the door to the car just BREAKS and opens up.
(Maybe Ephidell had knocked the cop that was watching the car out so she could escape.)
-Mhirou runs away even though she's thinking "WTF HAPPENED" and goes back to the gang for help.
-Well they're DEFINITELY not going to let her back in now with the cops after her!
-And then maybe Ephidell appears when she's handcuffed. OHHHHH. Lol. Terrible. xD
What are your thoughts on this so far? DISCUSS BELOW!
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THE DEAL WITH KHARD
Making Khard more relevant. In the youth home with Mhirou before they turned too old, they heard about this place where people hang out (abandoned building?) and they go check it out because they have nowhere else to go. Hooligans and lazy bums etc. hang out there. He realizes this is a bad crowd and not a good way to live life, so he gets out as soon as he can with his coffee shop job etc. Mhirou just kept getting roped back in because she didn't have the motivation to change her life for...whatever reason, personality or what have you. He tries to help her change and she didn't so he cut ties
Khard really works in Public Relations, starts in data entry? and works his way on up so he can make a decent living. Turns out that the head of his PR firm is a Phashu whoooooa. (Overhears a conversation or something) He finds out that not every Phashu is as kindly as Ephidell and Mhirou, that there's this Phashu group that means harm to humans, feels obligated to tell Ephidell/Mhirou about it. Maybe tells them during the 'hangouts' timeframe, when Mhirou is trying to build up her uh...human resistance or whatever. Get her self control. That would make the most sense! Maybe he sneaks around for information and gets caught and gets in trouble oooOOOooOOOOO!!!!!!
PS does Adrian still exist? Or does he die? Is he just cannon fodder for the early episodes? And DOES HE KNOW MHIROU?
Tension between Ephidell and Ryezick. Ephidell sees the flaw in immortality and doesn't think that Phashu should be in charge because of the OBVIOUS flaws in having people with too much power IN power. So that's why they butt heads and after Ephidells character development that's why he cares about what's going on!
Humans relevant? It is okay that they are not right now, as long as we introduce them later! Seeing as humans don't even KNOW about Phashu (other than like...the select few) it makes sense that they aren't involved. Maybe later on in uh...the third story arc humans become aware that Phashu exist and something can happen with that.
Kaz??? Maybe he doesn't die? And he reveals the thing about the Ephidell slaughter in the past? BACKSTORY! Let's not call him Kaz so we don't think of Kaz uh....Ruben? wharves
Maybe he was a gangster! Or whatever. Or is! Has always been with the mob since he was a kid so that's his life.
Maybe the kid gang got absorbed by an ACTUAL organized crime gang and started changing for the worse. So things are changing slowly.
And Adrian and Libby were in the kid gang and never left and got taken under Rubens wing because of the mobster takeover so yeah. Then when they meet Mhirou they're kinda weird about it because she LEFT the gang? But Ruben doesn't really care, isn't going to rat her out because he wouldn't gain anything from it.
In the past? He saw Ephidell kill a bunch of people and...how does he feel about that?
Ephidell puts Mhirou in the basement so she'll be safe for the moment...whyever he leaves. Maybe something with Quo? Probably not. Why are Libby and Adrian down there? What is the mob using the YMCA for? Uhhhh? Ruben is just showing it to them because.....??D? THERE IS LOOT IN THE SAFE!???
Maybe they find Mhirou down there and they are kind of...contemplating killing her? Then she reveals that Ephidell brought her there and Ruben is like ???????? whoa whoa whoa??? Because he remembers Ephidell from the past....slaughter
How does Quo fit in?
Draw out the...scenes with Ruben/Adrian/Libby more, give Mhirou more people to talk to.
Mhirou breaks out of the cop car and RUNS, confused about the situation, goes back to the gang...she doesn't know about the mob takeover, her old friends tell her that things are changed and she can't be hanging around while the COPS are chasing her and she's handcuffed, one of the mobsters comes in and is like 'WHATS GOIN ON' and they tell her to RUN!! Mobster is like who was that, her old friends try to cover for her and say she was no one/doesn't know anything, but they don't buy it and send out some guys to look around.
She runs away and hides in an alley somewhere, starts seeing shadows and realizes that her mystery stalker is back and she has had ENOUGH this is just ONE THING TOO MANY so she starts yelling and screaming, so the gangsters are able to find her easily and are smart enough to know she's who they're looking for, Mhirou is like BEYOND DONE at this point and obviously helpless and is like FUCK. MY. LIFE. OH MY GOD. So they're gonna shoot her but then Ephidell comes in and saves the day.
Mhirou hits someone at some point, probably Ephidell but maybe not? Probably not, someone more vulnerable. Maybe Khard! Realizes that she's turning into her shitty dad and oh no :(
After the YMCA where Libby dies, things heat up with the mob, Adrian doesn't feel safe going to Khard, nor does he think Khard would be safe if he visited and he doesn't want to get him involved. That's why Khard is just....in the dark. Until when the fuck ever
Making Khard more relevant. In the youth home with Mhirou before they turned too old, they heard about this place where people hang out (abandoned building?) and they go check it out because they have nowhere else to go. Hooligans and lazy bums etc. hang out there. He realizes this is a bad crowd and not a good way to live life, so he gets out as soon as he can with his coffee shop job etc. Mhirou just kept getting roped back in because she didn't have the motivation to change her life for...whatever reason, personality or what have you. He tries to help her change and she didn't so he cut ties
Khard really works in Public Relations, starts in data entry? and works his way on up so he can make a decent living. Turns out that the head of his PR firm is a Phashu whoooooa. (Overhears a conversation or something) He finds out that not every Phashu is as kindly as Ephidell and Mhirou, that there's this Phashu group that means harm to humans, feels obligated to tell Ephidell/Mhirou about it. Maybe tells them during the 'hangouts' timeframe, when Mhirou is trying to build up her uh...human resistance or whatever. Get her self control. That would make the most sense! Maybe he sneaks around for information and gets caught and gets in trouble oooOOOooOOOOO!!!!!!
PS does Adrian still exist? Or does he die? Is he just cannon fodder for the early episodes? And DOES HE KNOW MHIROU?
Tension between Ephidell and Ryezick. Ephidell sees the flaw in immortality and doesn't think that Phashu should be in charge because of the OBVIOUS flaws in having people with too much power IN power. So that's why they butt heads and after Ephidells character development that's why he cares about what's going on!
Humans relevant? It is okay that they are not right now, as long as we introduce them later! Seeing as humans don't even KNOW about Phashu (other than like...the select few) it makes sense that they aren't involved. Maybe later on in uh...the third story arc humans become aware that Phashu exist and something can happen with that.
Kaz??? Maybe he doesn't die? And he reveals the thing about the Ephidell slaughter in the past? BACKSTORY! Let's not call him Kaz so we don't think of Kaz uh....Ruben? wharves
Maybe he was a gangster! Or whatever. Or is! Has always been with the mob since he was a kid so that's his life.
Maybe the kid gang got absorbed by an ACTUAL organized crime gang and started changing for the worse. So things are changing slowly.
And Adrian and Libby were in the kid gang and never left and got taken under Rubens wing because of the mobster takeover so yeah. Then when they meet Mhirou they're kinda weird about it because she LEFT the gang? But Ruben doesn't really care, isn't going to rat her out because he wouldn't gain anything from it.
In the past? He saw Ephidell kill a bunch of people and...how does he feel about that?
Ephidell puts Mhirou in the basement so she'll be safe for the moment...whyever he leaves. Maybe something with Quo? Probably not. Why are Libby and Adrian down there? What is the mob using the YMCA for? Uhhhh? Ruben is just showing it to them because.....??D? THERE IS LOOT IN THE SAFE!???
Maybe they find Mhirou down there and they are kind of...contemplating killing her? Then she reveals that Ephidell brought her there and Ruben is like ???????? whoa whoa whoa??? Because he remembers Ephidell from the past....slaughter
How does Quo fit in?
Draw out the...scenes with Ruben/Adrian/Libby more, give Mhirou more people to talk to.
Mhirou breaks out of the cop car and RUNS, confused about the situation, goes back to the gang...she doesn't know about the mob takeover, her old friends tell her that things are changed and she can't be hanging around while the COPS are chasing her and she's handcuffed, one of the mobsters comes in and is like 'WHATS GOIN ON' and they tell her to RUN!! Mobster is like who was that, her old friends try to cover for her and say she was no one/doesn't know anything, but they don't buy it and send out some guys to look around.
She runs away and hides in an alley somewhere, starts seeing shadows and realizes that her mystery stalker is back and she has had ENOUGH this is just ONE THING TOO MANY so she starts yelling and screaming, so the gangsters are able to find her easily and are smart enough to know she's who they're looking for, Mhirou is like BEYOND DONE at this point and obviously helpless and is like FUCK. MY. LIFE. OH MY GOD. So they're gonna shoot her but then Ephidell comes in and saves the day.
Mhirou hits someone at some point, probably Ephidell but maybe not? Probably not, someone more vulnerable. Maybe Khard! Realizes that she's turning into her shitty dad and oh no :(
After the YMCA where Libby dies, things heat up with the mob, Adrian doesn't feel safe going to Khard, nor does he think Khard would be safe if he visited and he doesn't want to get him involved. That's why Khard is just....in the dark. Until when the fuck ever
YOOOOOOOOOO
-Opening: Mhirou is running from gangsters/cops
-She's scared in the alleyway, gangsters find her and are creepin on up, she's helpless and doesn't know what to do
-they die suddenly, and we don't know why! END SCENE!
-What do we need to establish?
-Mhirou's situation, her personality
-Mhirou is being stalked, subtly
-Start with the first 'unnatural' ooh I'm being followed? Maybe? Hmm maybe it was just the wind scene?
-Mhirou is angry!
-In the bathroom of a restaurant? Sees something in the mirror, brushes it off. Goes back out and meets up with her people,
-PS ADD HUMOR EVERY ONCE IN A WHILE
-its Khard and Adrian and Libby, Scotty and who knows who else, having dinner or whatever, having a chat and being normal people
-they are goofing around talking about how they're going to skip out on the check? Some kind of wacky scheme or something
-they do whatever
-while talking, Khard suggests that they actually like...pay for the meal and everyone starts rippin on him "Mhirou backs him up...a little" He leaves a tip while everyone else is running away
-they do it anyway
-they meet up at their...headquarters and talk with people, just random background gang shit about drugs/petty crime/thievery
-khard is AROUND but not actually part of the gang...he still does stuff with them occasionally. So he's not actually living with them but Mhirou can at least be thinking about him.
-There's some rich kid that steals from his parents, some druggies, establish wacky gang people
-Some kids dad is hanging around and they're like 'who is that dude?' he explains no he's cool, he's got a business he wants me to help out with
-everyone's all interested because they want to make money
-they explain that its kind of exclusive but he'll see what he can do
-Mhirou is listening intrigued END SCENE
-Some other paranoia stalker shit
-Mhirou's out alone, getting to know her a little more
-her barefoot thing, maybe she likes to run! To clear her head, stay in shape, whatever
-at dusktime
-starts seeing something weird...hears her footsteps echoing...stops and tries to listen, nothing around? starts again, kind of sounds like someone is running behind her. Spooky!
-Imagining things, trying to NOT to think about it END SCENE
-Over the next few days she's starting to notice more adults hanging around at home base
-She hears things about jobs...at first its little things (fixing cars, package delivery etc.)
-One day, someone decided to be a little shit and open a package and it was lotsa money!
-Scene about the discovery of the package and the guy showing them the contents
-They talk about it, discuss, are dumb kids and Scotty decides to take some of the money
-Scotty suddenly isn't around anymore and Mhirou has a bad feeling about everything, realizes something is going wrong
-While all this is going on, she's asking everyone if they feel watched, because SHE does, going into her recent experiences and whatnot. They brush her off
-That cool scene with the guys "What money?" poor Scotty :(
-Mhirou goes to visit Khard? Establish that Mhirou has a thing for Khard and overcoming her pride to ask for advice
-Establish that her dad is in prison from child abuse (NOT DRUNK) and she has no one really to go back to
-She's running, hears footsteps again? Yells at the noise, sees red eyes in the bushes and is ?????? runs a little faster
-starts thinking that this might not be natural
-Mhirou visits with Khard, talking about his niceish place and he mentions he has nice things because he works 3 jobs for them? Or whatever, he gives her crap about still being in the same situation not doing anything to improve her life
-Mhirou lets her walls down around Khard
-She tells Khard about all the stuff that's going on, something happened to Scotty :(
-Khard asks if they're mobsters, Mhirou realizes they probably are!
-Khard tells her she knows he's given up on trying to help her, but asks her how long it's going to be before SHE has an accident?
-She asks for one more chance and he says yes
(This is the last time they see each other...so Khard is assuming the worst, then after talking with Adrian (who was around when people were looking for Mhirou so he knows whats up) Khard thinks Mhirou is dead, Khard is worried for Adrian but Adrian says this is the only chance he has so he's just gonna keep his head down)
-She goes to get her stuff, some gangster is acting all buddy buddy with her and it's uncomfortable, she's a bad liar the end
-(Doesn't go back to Khard because of pride and involving him and stuff. Also feels more comfortable with her group so it's HARD to stay away?)
-Mhirou is on her own, out in the crappy rundown city.
-Realizes getting food for free (stealing) doesn't work very well on her own because store clerks think she's a bum. (she doesn't wear shoes and is kinda scruffy, and has all her stuff with her, lol)
-Now she's pretty hungry at this point. Resists the urge to come crawling back.
-The thing with scary Ephidell. Walking forward in the dark, sees a tall man silhouette, and it's just standing there... so as Mhirou gets closer it starts feeling pretty uncomfortable so she turns to go the other way BUT, right as she turns she thinks she sees the figures eyes and there's this unnerving feeling where she's walking but doesn't want to look-- looks anyway, and he's just gone. WHAAT. Walk away faster.
-After THAT enough is enough and Mhirou goes back due to fear and hunger.
-rich kids father dude needs a personality (is the one always intimidating Mhirou)
-Mob boss guy is there to welcome Mhirou back and questions her loyalty unnervingly.
-Adrian is casually going about his business pretending to ignore the situation but listening in.
-Mob boss guy tells her to prove her loyalty by robbing a convenience store. Gives her a gun.
-Mhirou does NOT want to go back outside in the dark so she suggests that someone go with to prove she did it.
-Maybe Adrian volunteers but Mob Boss guy is one to the fact that they know each other. Has some other kid go with.
-So, she does it! Puts on her tough face and pops into the first gas station they find, while the kids waits outside.
-Holds up the place with the angriest face she can. (hoody + bandana)
-While the store clerk is putting his register cash in a plastic bag, Mhirou lowers her gun a bit because she's distracted by the candy at the front counter when she realizes she hasn't eaten ALL day and she's starving.
-Mhirou gets a candy bar and is distracted while she's trying to open it with a gun in her hand.
-Shop keep is in the hood so he waits for an opportunity and swings her with a baseball bat while she has the slightest relief of eating the candy bar. She falls back and stumbles with her gun before the shop keep disarms her and calls the cops.
-Add some funny lingo about, "great, hunger will be the death of me" or something I dunno
-Cops come, blah blah. Arrest her. Put her in the back of a cop car handcuffed.
-She's locked in the cop car and is sitting there trying to process what's happening and what's going to happen, and what would Khard think, and how the kids gonna tell everyone and stuff. (I'M FUCKED) No stuff anymore/gun obviously.
-(Maybe Mhirou went to jail/juvie once or twice before)
-Hears the cops talking with clerk, all of a sudden Mhirou hears a car alarm and the cops running out after something.
-She's trying to lean over and see what's going on when CRUNCH-- the door to the car is literally manhandled open, as if by some hulk thing. (Cause it's all bent open)
-She's sitting there contemplating what the fuck just HAPPENED, and whether to actually run or not.
-Ends up running out, still handcuffed. Car alarm in the background, chatter of cops in the distance.
-Runs back to the mob hideout because-- well she's kind of desperate!!
-She runs to the base and finds Adrian and Libby alone so she approaches them, pleading for help.
-Libby wants to help and beg the mob boss to help her, but Adrian thinks it's better if she just runs because she's going to get them all killed.
-Maybe they're searching for some handcuff keys, and Mhirou spots some of her stuff.
-She grabs the messanger bag-- they can't find the keys. Libby puts the messanger bag around her since she's still handcuffed when they start to hear the bosses coming.
-Adrian tells her to RUN. So.. she runs!
-But not before the boss just barely sees her leave and is like, "WTF"
-Adrian covers his ass for him and Libby, "She just ran in and grabbed her stuff! I DUNNO"
-Aaaaand the mob boss sends a couple of guys to hunt her down.
-(I guess at this point the kids has already relayed the messages that Mhirou was arrested and so maybe they're like, "wtf is she doing here, gonna lead the cops to us, let's tie up loose ends and just kill her!"
-Mhirou is ruuuuunnin'. Probably a LITTLE upset. (sirens in the background!)
-Finds a dead end alleyway where she can take cover and run in, hides against a dumpter or something.
-Takes a few minutes to calm down and process things. Realizes how fucked she is and wonders what to do.
-Suddenly she hears the fire escape that she's sitting underneath creak. (Like someone is walking on it)
-She looks up but there's nothing there.
-She's suspicious if the mob has found her, (or the cops,) so she carefully peeks out just a little from behind the dumpster and BAM. Creepy dark man is back, just STANDING there. She's frozen in fear for a second before hiding back behind the dumpster and just loosing it.
-Screams her head of, along the lines of "LEAVE ME ALONE". and such. Just can't take it anymore.
-Goes into a sob and the audio attracts the mob to her. She is suddenly blinded by a flashlight shining in her eyes when she's pistol whipped by the dudes.
-Kind of collecting herself when they pick her up, looking her over with the flashlight to make sure she's her.
-Prop her up against the dead end wall preparing to shoot her, say, "sorry about this" or something before gun cock and then--!!
-Mhirou sees a whole lot of movement in front of her as something moves in and she hears the sounds of bones breaking and the men screaming. When she opens her tear ridden eyes she sees the pile of two bodies on the ground.
-She's frozen with fear, no where to go and restrained. Then she sees a figure slowly stand up from the bodies, eyes glowing red.
-" EPHIDELL SAYS SOMETHING TO MHIROU THAT IS INTRIGUING END CHAPTER.
"Thought it was about time I intervened."
"It's nice to finally say hello"
"Couldn't stand to watch that any longer."
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-Opening: Mhirou is running from gangsters/cops
-She's scared in the alleyway, gangsters find her and are creepin on up, she's helpless and doesn't know what to do
-they die suddenly, and we don't know why! END SCENE!
-What do we need to establish?
-Mhirou's situation, her personality
-Mhirou is being stalked, subtly
-Start with the first 'unnatural' ooh I'm being followed? Maybe? Hmm maybe it was just the wind scene?
-Mhirou is angry!
-In the bathroom of a restaurant? Sees something in the mirror, brushes it off. Goes back out and meets up with her people,
-PS ADD HUMOR EVERY ONCE IN A WHILE
-its Khard and Adrian and Libby, Scotty and who knows who else, having dinner or whatever, having a chat and being normal people
-they are goofing around talking about how they're going to skip out on the check? Some kind of wacky scheme or something
-they do whatever
-while talking, Khard suggests that they actually like...pay for the meal and everyone starts rippin on him "Mhirou backs him up...a little" He leaves a tip while everyone else is running away
-they do it anyway
-they meet up at their...headquarters and talk with people, just random background gang shit about drugs/petty crime/thievery
-khard is AROUND but not actually part of the gang...he still does stuff with them occasionally. So he's not actually living with them but Mhirou can at least be thinking about him.
-There's some rich kid that steals from his parents, some druggies, establish wacky gang people
-Some kids dad is hanging around and they're like 'who is that dude?' he explains no he's cool, he's got a business he wants me to help out with
-everyone's all interested because they want to make money
-they explain that its kind of exclusive but he'll see what he can do
-Mhirou is listening intrigued END SCENE
-Some other paranoia stalker shit
-Mhirou's out alone, getting to know her a little more
-her barefoot thing, maybe she likes to run! To clear her head, stay in shape, whatever
-at dusktime
-starts seeing something weird...hears her footsteps echoing...stops and tries to listen, nothing around? starts again, kind of sounds like someone is running behind her. Spooky!
-Imagining things, trying to NOT to think about it END SCENE
-Over the next few days she's starting to notice more adults hanging around at home base
-She hears things about jobs...at first its little things (fixing cars, package delivery etc.)
-One day, someone decided to be a little shit and open a package and it was lotsa money!
-Scene about the discovery of the package and the guy showing them the contents
-They talk about it, discuss, are dumb kids and Scotty decides to take some of the money
-Scotty suddenly isn't around anymore and Mhirou has a bad feeling about everything, realizes something is going wrong
-While all this is going on, she's asking everyone if they feel watched, because SHE does, going into her recent experiences and whatnot. They brush her off
-That cool scene with the guys "What money?" poor Scotty :(
-Mhirou goes to visit Khard? Establish that Mhirou has a thing for Khard and overcoming her pride to ask for advice
-Establish that her dad is in prison from child abuse (NOT DRUNK) and she has no one really to go back to
-She's running, hears footsteps again? Yells at the noise, sees red eyes in the bushes and is ?????? runs a little faster
-starts thinking that this might not be natural
-Mhirou visits with Khard, talking about his niceish place and he mentions he has nice things because he works 3 jobs for them? Or whatever, he gives her crap about still being in the same situation not doing anything to improve her life
-Mhirou lets her walls down around Khard
-She tells Khard about all the stuff that's going on, something happened to Scotty :(
-Khard asks if they're mobsters, Mhirou realizes they probably are!
-Khard tells her she knows he's given up on trying to help her, but asks her how long it's going to be before SHE has an accident?
-She asks for one more chance and he says yes
(This is the last time they see each other...so Khard is assuming the worst, then after talking with Adrian (who was around when people were looking for Mhirou so he knows whats up) Khard thinks Mhirou is dead, Khard is worried for Adrian but Adrian says this is the only chance he has so he's just gonna keep his head down)
-She goes to get her stuff, some gangster is acting all buddy buddy with her and it's uncomfortable, she's a bad liar the end
-(Doesn't go back to Khard because of pride and involving him and stuff. Also feels more comfortable with her group so it's HARD to stay away?)
-Mhirou is on her own, out in the crappy rundown city.
-Realizes getting food for free (stealing) doesn't work very well on her own because store clerks think she's a bum. (she doesn't wear shoes and is kinda scruffy, and has all her stuff with her, lol)
-Now she's pretty hungry at this point. Resists the urge to come crawling back.
-The thing with scary Ephidell. Walking forward in the dark, sees a tall man silhouette, and it's just standing there... so as Mhirou gets closer it starts feeling pretty uncomfortable so she turns to go the other way BUT, right as she turns she thinks she sees the figures eyes and there's this unnerving feeling where she's walking but doesn't want to look-- looks anyway, and he's just gone. WHAAT. Walk away faster.
-After THAT enough is enough and Mhirou goes back due to fear and hunger.
-rich kids father dude needs a personality (is the one always intimidating Mhirou)
-Mob boss guy is there to welcome Mhirou back and questions her loyalty unnervingly.
-Adrian is casually going about his business pretending to ignore the situation but listening in.
-Mob boss guy tells her to prove her loyalty by robbing a convenience store. Gives her a gun.
-Mhirou does NOT want to go back outside in the dark so she suggests that someone go with to prove she did it.
-Maybe Adrian volunteers but Mob Boss guy is one to the fact that they know each other. Has some other kid go with.
-So, she does it! Puts on her tough face and pops into the first gas station they find, while the kids waits outside.
-Holds up the place with the angriest face she can. (hoody + bandana)
-While the store clerk is putting his register cash in a plastic bag, Mhirou lowers her gun a bit because she's distracted by the candy at the front counter when she realizes she hasn't eaten ALL day and she's starving.
-Mhirou gets a candy bar and is distracted while she's trying to open it with a gun in her hand.
-Shop keep is in the hood so he waits for an opportunity and swings her with a baseball bat while she has the slightest relief of eating the candy bar. She falls back and stumbles with her gun before the shop keep disarms her and calls the cops.
-Add some funny lingo about, "great, hunger will be the death of me" or something I dunno
-Cops come, blah blah. Arrest her. Put her in the back of a cop car handcuffed.
-She's locked in the cop car and is sitting there trying to process what's happening and what's going to happen, and what would Khard think, and how the kids gonna tell everyone and stuff. (I'M FUCKED) No stuff anymore/gun obviously.
-(Maybe Mhirou went to jail/juvie once or twice before)
-Hears the cops talking with clerk, all of a sudden Mhirou hears a car alarm and the cops running out after something.
-She's trying to lean over and see what's going on when CRUNCH-- the door to the car is literally manhandled open, as if by some hulk thing. (Cause it's all bent open)
-She's sitting there contemplating what the fuck just HAPPENED, and whether to actually run or not.
-Ends up running out, still handcuffed. Car alarm in the background, chatter of cops in the distance.
-Runs back to the mob hideout because-- well she's kind of desperate!!
-She runs to the base and finds Adrian and Libby alone so she approaches them, pleading for help.
-Libby wants to help and beg the mob boss to help her, but Adrian thinks it's better if she just runs because she's going to get them all killed.
-Maybe they're searching for some handcuff keys, and Mhirou spots some of her stuff.
-She grabs the messanger bag-- they can't find the keys. Libby puts the messanger bag around her since she's still handcuffed when they start to hear the bosses coming.
-Adrian tells her to RUN. So.. she runs!
-But not before the boss just barely sees her leave and is like, "WTF"
-Adrian covers his ass for him and Libby, "She just ran in and grabbed her stuff! I DUNNO"
-Aaaaand the mob boss sends a couple of guys to hunt her down.
-(I guess at this point the kids has already relayed the messages that Mhirou was arrested and so maybe they're like, "wtf is she doing here, gonna lead the cops to us, let's tie up loose ends and just kill her!"
-Mhirou is ruuuuunnin'. Probably a LITTLE upset. (sirens in the background!)
-Finds a dead end alleyway where she can take cover and run in, hides against a dumpter or something.
-Takes a few minutes to calm down and process things. Realizes how fucked she is and wonders what to do.
-Suddenly she hears the fire escape that she's sitting underneath creak. (Like someone is walking on it)
-She looks up but there's nothing there.
-She's suspicious if the mob has found her, (or the cops,) so she carefully peeks out just a little from behind the dumpster and BAM. Creepy dark man is back, just STANDING there. She's frozen in fear for a second before hiding back behind the dumpster and just loosing it.
-Screams her head of, along the lines of "LEAVE ME ALONE". and such. Just can't take it anymore.
-Goes into a sob and the audio attracts the mob to her. She is suddenly blinded by a flashlight shining in her eyes when she's pistol whipped by the dudes.
-Kind of collecting herself when they pick her up, looking her over with the flashlight to make sure she's her.
-Prop her up against the dead end wall preparing to shoot her, say, "sorry about this" or something before gun cock and then--!!
-Mhirou sees a whole lot of movement in front of her as something moves in and she hears the sounds of bones breaking and the men screaming. When she opens her tear ridden eyes she sees the pile of two bodies on the ground.
-She's frozen with fear, no where to go and restrained. Then she sees a figure slowly stand up from the bodies, eyes glowing red.
-" EPHIDELL SAYS SOMETHING TO MHIROU THAT IS INTRIGUING END CHAPTER.
"Thought it was about time I intervened."
"It's nice to finally say hello"
"Couldn't stand to watch that any longer."
"